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Okay, back on topic!
Wow, talk about a hard virtue to write about! Chastity is about so much more than what I thought. Check out this definition:
Abstaining from sexual conduct according to one's state in life; the practice of courtly love and romantic friendship. Cleanliness through cultivated good health and hygiene, and maintained by refraining from intoxicants. To be honest with oneself, one's family, one's friends, and to all of humanity. Embracing of moral wholesomeness and achieving purity of thought-through education and betterment. The ability to refrain from being distracted and influenced by hostility, temptation or corruption. (Matching vice: lust.)
Okay, the story...
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Chastity
I envied Georgia.
To the chagrin of many girls, all the boys had crushes on her. Girls like me, who wouldn't think twice about making out behind the gym in order to get some attention. Georgia was careful not to even show cleavage.
Some girls tried to spread rumours about her, but Georgia was so well liked that none of them stuck. The one about the burn scars covering her chest needed some damage control, however.
Looking at Georgia, I knew that if I could go back in time and make different choices to be more like her, I would.
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So, what do you think?
Also, if you want to read what others have written, follow this link! But especially read this one by my friend Lissa... it's freaking awesome and puts mine to utter shame. Utter and complete shame.
I like it. Seems very much like a diary or journal entry a young woman might make while trying to backtrack and see how she got where she is today. :)
ReplyDeleteHow many of us, like your unnamed protag, would like to go back in time and make more virtuous choices? May I have a show of hands, please?
ReplyDeleteThanks guys :)
ReplyDeleteI know I'd definitely go back and change a few things!
Love it. I can't help, but wonder how she ended up envying Georgia. Did she just drift into the role of a girl who never thinks twice about kissing or does she just long to be something she's not. Interesting.
ReplyDeleteHmmm... I think her envy comes from not having a good opinion of herself. The words "self loathing" come to mind. She certainly has low self esteem, and is, I think, jealous of Georgia's unconscious confidence in who she is.
ReplyDeleteAnd thank you :)
How can you think mine is so awesome when it's only 100 words and like, nothing interesting happens? Yours is WAY cooler than mine.
ReplyDeletePS I LOVE the name Georgia.
And in answer to Suzanne Lucero, I would like to go back in time, but not to be more virtuous. I'd like to experiment with the sins a little and see how I end up. The virtuous life was nothing short of calm, predictable... boring. No stories to tell of anything... that's why I make stuff up now and why my characters are so much more interesting than myself.
So glad you decided to take part! I love this, but like Lissa I would probably go back and be a tad more sinful!
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I really liked this! And okay, I'll go ahead and confess. This works for the other sex, too. Gosh, if I could go back and get another crack at those Robert Frost "Road Less Taken" moments.
ReplyDeleteGreat work!
I like it. The Virtues are harder to write and I like your approach to look at the Virtuous one through the eyes of another. I also really like Georgia, even knowing so little about her.
ReplyDeleteThis is a lovely set up. I get quite a strong sense of of adolescence and lack of sureness from the character and you convey it so simply. Really good job.
ReplyDeleteWriting in the first person really suits this :-P From your loving Hubby.
ReplyDeletePS... what boys? Give me their names so that I can put a contract on their heads :-P
The MC feels very real here. Nice work.
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